Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealty than they have ever been. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective tackling this problem?

Nowadays, more

people

feel that city areas show more unhealthy atmosphere than it was. From my perspective, it is caused by higher levels of

pollution

produced

from

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vehicles

also

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raising

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of

waste

as a result

of increasing

the

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population density. To tackle these problems,

people

should choose to use

frequently

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public transportation and try to

limite

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limit

the

production

of

waste

or trash.

Vast

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majority of

citizens

in urban areas

has

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at least one vehicle to commute every day and it causes more

pollution

such

as CO2 released into the environment.

This

condition makes many

people

suffering

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from respiratory diseases. In Jakarta

for example

, because of air

pollution

, numerous

citizens

from various types of age groups indicated suffering the respiratory problems.

Besides

that, the

production

of

waste

seems to be wider than previous, it is

happened

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due to

lifestyle where more

people

are buying many items and throwing them away quickly. To tackle

this

problem, individuals

of

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cities should be encouraged to travel by public transportation. If more humans use non-private

vehicles

, it means that there will decline in the amount of air

pollution

.

This

action must be followed by establishing facilities to give a convenient sense of users. The local council and authority have to be proactive in promoting public utilities through advertisements.

Thus

, numerous individuals will be attracted by

that

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ads.

In addition

,

citizens

should be more selective

to

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purchasing every product so it does not become

waste

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in the future. Minimum

waste

production

will In conclusion, the sense of unhealthy in the city areas might come from air

pollution

caused by

vehicles

and the

rise

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levels of

waste

. To address

this

issues

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,

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the goverment

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goverment

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government

must involve

citizens

to commute

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in commuting

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by using

vehicles

facilitated by authorities.

Therefore

people

should be more selective

to buy

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in buying

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a product so it can discourage

from

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apply

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waste

production