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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy ni 20 and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart illustrates data on three different groups
age
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 of people in Yemen and Italy in 2000 with
prediction
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predictions
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 for 2050. The unit given is percentages.
Overall
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, the
people
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number of people
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 in
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age
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the age
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 group from 15 to 59 in Yemen has a slight rise
whereas
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 in Italy has a
decline
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declining
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 trend. Looking at the population of Yemen, in 2000, older people stood at 3.6%
then
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extimated
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estimated
 will increase to 5.7% after 50 years.
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Age
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Aged
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 15 to 59
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year
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years
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 old fell a close
second,
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accounting for more than two-fifths before climbing to
the
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apply
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first place with
projection
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a projection
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 in 2050,
57.3
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of 57.3
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%.
As for
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Age
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age
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 below 14
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year
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years
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 old accounted for 46.3% in
initial
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the initial
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year
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. It is predicted to decrease to just above a third in the future. Regarding Italy individuals,
age
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 groups from 15 to more than 60
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year
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years
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 old will likely
to
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apply
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increase by 20% in the mentioned projection period, 46.2% and 42.3%, respectively.
In contrast
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, a younger generation below 14
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year
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years
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 old has a drop
with
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of
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 11.5% in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words age, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population distribution
  • age group
  • young population
  • mature population
  • aging society
  • demographic shift
  • proportion
  • dominant
  • balanced distribution
  • projected increase
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