The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton famous attractions in England from 1980 to 2010
The graph shows us the proportion of visitors who paid a visit to four Brighton attractions in England between 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, the number of visitors art
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to art
gallery
decreased significantly. Fix the agreement mistake
galleries
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there was increase
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an increase
pavilion
and pier, the Correct article usage
the pavilion
quantity
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number
to
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festival
fell steadily over Correct article usage
the festival
30years
.
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30 years
line
graph, visitors who joined to Add an article
a line
the line
festival
got up Add an article
the festival
for
about 30%, Change preposition
by
then
the numer
of people fell Correct your spelling
number
nearly
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people who visited art Add a comma
time,
gallery
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galleries
,
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then
fell gradually to 10%.
And also
, the number of tourists who visited pavilion
rocketed to Correct article usage
the pavilion
whole
50% in 1995. And Correct article usage
a whole
then
in 2010s
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the 2010s
this
figure fell gradually to 30%. As we can see in graph
, the percentage of pier tourists fluctuated slightly between 1980 and 2000, but Add an article
the graph
then
pier
ended Correct article usage
the pier
this
period up
.
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pavilion
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Pavilion
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