The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton famous attractions in England from 1980 to 2010

The line graph illustrates the proportion of tourists who visited Brighton famous attractions  in England from 1980 to 2010
The graph provides information about the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton—art
gallery
,
pavilion
,
pier
, and festival—from 1980 to 2010.There are two main trends
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fluctuating
popularity
and steady change. As regards the
pavilion
, its
popularity
rose sharply over the first 15 years from 1985 to 2000, reaching a peak of 50% in 1995.
However
, its appeal
then
declined steadily, falling to 30% by the end of the
period
.
By contrast
, the
pier
, which started with only 10% of tourists in 1980, experienced a rise over the years. Its
popularity
doubled, finishing at about 22% in 2010. Meanwhile, the art
gallery
peaked in 1985 with nearly 40% of visitors but declined significantly
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, ending with only 10% by 2010. The
pavilion
was the most popular attraction for much of the
period
, peaking at 50% in 1995.
However
,
after
this
point, its
popularity
declined steadily to around 30% by 2010.
In contrast
, the art
gallery
had an early peak at nearly 40% in 1985, but its visitor numbers dropped sharply, reaching only 10% by 2010.The
pier
, which had the lowest percentage of visitors in 1980 about 10%, showed consistent growth throughout the years. It nearly doubled in
popularity
, finishing at approximately 22% in 2010. Meanwhile, the festival remained relatively stable over the entire
period
, fluctuating slightly around 25% without any major peaks or declines.
Thus
, the
Pavilion
showed both sharp growth and decline, the
Pier
increased steadily, the Art
Gallery
experienced a dramatic fall, and the Festival maintained a steady trend throughout the
period
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