You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. 

Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
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The table provides key information about the inhabitants of New Zealand between 2011 and 2012 based on age.
Overall
, it can be seen that there was an
increase
in the
number
of people regardless of their ages, in 2012 than in 2011.
In addition
, the population of age under 15 and from 15 to 39 experienced a decline, in 2012,
whereas
the other two groups of inhabitants saw an
increase
.
According to
what is shown, there was a minor
increase
in the
number
of all ages, in 2012 compared to 2011 by .6%.
In addition
, the
number
of individuals under 15 was 898.160, in 2011, which slightly declined by .2%, in 2012.
Moreover
, there was another decrease in the
number
of population from 15 to 39, which was equivalent to the previous decrease of adolescents under 15, at .2%. In terms of ages 40 to 64, 1331.907 was their
number
, in 2011, which roughly rose to 1339.898, in 2012. Regarding people of 65 and above, there was a big
increase
in their
number
, in 2012 by 4% in comparison to 2011.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
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