Government should spend money to increase the development of sport and art for school students rather than supporting professional sport and art performances for general public. Do you agree or disagree?

Government

support is one of the

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for any

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. Some people

thinks

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that the

government

should promote the improvement of school students who are interested in

sports

and art, rather than advocate pro events of those activities.

This

essay will discuss both aspects mentioned above in the following paragraphs and illustrate the reason why I believe that

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development has more beneficial outcomes.

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a

government

fund, supporting

in

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proficient sporting and artistic affairs can offer huge financial gain for

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,

for example

, Thai boxing is Thailand’s national sport which greatly

attract

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tourists every year. If the

government

advance Thai boxing

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in terms of marketing, contest

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, and organized

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, it may boost

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tourism revenue including accommodations, food, and shopping.

Moreover

,

this

can perhaps lead to

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considered as a host to arrange any international competition in the future, if domestic events perform well.

Consequently

, the country will derive substantial

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from it.

However

, if the

government

upgrades education for these fields, it possibly

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many advantages

such

as

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system for students, who want to become an athlete or

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, and inspiring excellent activities

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kids.

First,

having a good standard of learning procedure is essential to become successful,

while

a huge budget to set it up is needed,

for example

, a high-level training consists of a lot of expensive standard equipment:

sports

machines, art supplies,

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.

Second,

many children are motivated to engage in

sports

and art, which are physical and mental

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, raising healthy hobbies among young people.

This

promotion can probably not only help youth’s well-being but

also

increase competitive

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levels

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for them as national athletes or

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artists

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. In conclusion,

although

professional event endorsement can bring a significant economic benefit, investing in school education structure should be a focus for

government

spending since

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it perhaps publicly enhances

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the country’s

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potential in

sports

and arts of the next generation.