The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. The graph below shows the percentage of households with different kinds of technology in the U.S. from 1995 to 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph
illustrate
several types of technology used by families Change the verb form
illustrates
in contrast
, washing machine
,Fix the agreement mistake
machines
computer
, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
phone
, internet and Fix the agreement mistake
phones
DVD
player
by American households for five years.
Having a myopic look, Fix the agreement mistake
players
it is clear that
washing
machine had the highest levels over the period. Correct article usage
the washing
Conversely
, a dramatically decreased
in the percentage of Replace the word
dramatic decrease
DVD
players utilized in first
two years.Correct article usage
the first
while
,
Remove the comma
apply
other
four categories experienced a notable upturn during the same period.
Correct article usage
the other
Overall
, just about 15% of American families were
use Unnecessary verb
apply
DVD
players.In 1999 the amount of DVD
player users were
gradually increased to approximately 25%. Unnecessary verb
apply
Furthermore
, in 1998 the telephones used were considerably increased to nearly 75%. In contrast
,the percentage of homes with telephones exhibited the most significant increase, surging by roughly 57%,from 18% in 1995 to 75% by 1999.Submitted by ft00m_309 on
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dvd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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