A friend of yours has recently written to you asking for advice about a problem at work. You have had a similar problem at your workplace in the past. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell your friend how you feel about the problem explain how you faced a similar situation in the past suggest possible solutions to the problem

Dear Angelo, I am so sorry, that you have to feel
this
situation. I have had the same issue
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past at
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work
. It was a terrible
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,
however
, I can help you
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this
problem
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. My story
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happened
6 months ago, I wanted to get a little bit more money on my
sallary
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salary
. My boss was at the first time quite okay with my request and with my arguments,
however
, one and half
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after my first interview with him, my salary was still the same. It was
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me
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annoing
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annoying
situation and I asked him
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time and he was so rude
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me, he told me
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. I was so sad
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the
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work
every day. I had to be
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strong and stay
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my opinion. I
wan´t
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want
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work
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very badly, I couldn´t concentrate. I started to think about finishing my
work
.
However
, I had a big support in my second boss in the Czech
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. I sent him an email with my arguments, the results of my job and
moreover
my CV. So he called me and was
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very polite
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me. At
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last
, we made the agreement and my rate hour was accepted. My advice, stay
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strong and stay
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your opinion!
I
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happy for you, that
this
situation
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happened
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for you. Kind regards Andrea
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single idea or point. This will enhance the clarity of your writing.
coherence cohesion
Consider improving the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs by using transitional words and phrases.
task achievement
Be sure to address all parts of the task clearly and completely. For example, ensure you provide explicit advice on how your friend can resolve the problem.
suitable writing tone
You have appropriately used a friendly and concerned tone throughout the letter, which suits the context of writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
You have included a good closing statement, which provides a positive and supportive conclusion to your letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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