The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countried in the same period.

The first chart shows the population of England and Wales between 1700 and 2000. The second chart gives information about the birth and death rate in the same countried in the same period.
The bars of the first chart illustrate the number of people in England and Wales from 1700 and 2000
while
the second chart shows the birth
as well as
death
rates in the same countries for the same era.
According to
the first diagram, the population in both the countries were minimum in 1700
then
it started increasing slowly with time and reached its top in 2000.
In addition
, the number of people living in
the
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England and Wales become approximately 6 times the total population in 300 years from 1700 to 2000.
Overall
, the birth
rate
in both England and Wales was lowest in 1700 which was around 8 over 1000. Suddenly the birth
rate
enormously increased and reached 23 in 1800 but with the passage of time, it started decreasing and came to the level of 12 in just 200 enums.
However
, the
death
rate
was around 7 over 1000 humans in 1700.
Furthermore
, the
death
rate
also
increased and reached 17 among 1000.The
death
rate
then
started to decrease and
come
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to its lowest level of all these years
is
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