In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates problems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people.
Living longer than the expected average life span is increasing gradually than earlier. Few argue that it is beneficial to the younger generation in many ways,
while
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the
others Correct article usage
apply
argue
Verb problem
apply
the
oppose it stating it might be Correct article usage
apply
burden
or problematic to the Correct article usage
a burden
government
. Use synonyms
This
essay will discuss Linking Words
pros
and cons of Correct article usage
the pros
this
ageing Linking Words
population
and I believe Use synonyms
this
is more advantageous Linking Words
compare
to Change the form of the verb
compared
cons
.
Correct article usage
the cons
Firstly
, the main advantage is that their life experience, Linking Words
advices
, and suggestions cannot be taught to Change the wording
advice
pieces of advice
bits of advice
younger
generation through some courses or learned by ourselves. Youths nowadays hardly remember and incorporate human values. They are attracted more towards materialistic items and Add an article
the younger
a younger
ignoring
humanity. Wrong verb form
ignore
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, working parents hardly Linking Words
spent
time with their kids, leaving them behind with caretakers to look after them Wrong verb form
spend
causes
Wrong verb form
causing
lack
of parenting and love. These where old Correct article usage
a lack
people
might help them in looking after their Use synonyms
grandchildren’s
and teaching them about valuable things like respecting elders, aiding each other, and building moral values. Would help in growing Change noun form
grandchildren
younger
generation towards the betterment of the future and society.
Correct article usage
the younger
On the other hand
, Linking Words
people
who oppose the increasing ageing Use synonyms
population
might cause problems Use synonyms
to
the Change preposition
for
government
Use synonyms
give
reasons like Wrong verb form
giving
increase
in tax Correct article usage
an increase
payment
, pension Fix the agreement mistake
payments
scheme
, and investing Fix the agreement mistake
schemes
free
medical check-ups, and treatments. Change preposition
in free
For instance
, as the Linking Words
population
grows Use synonyms
government
need to aid in looking after their health by providing good medical infrastructure, which can be done by increasing their pension amount so that they can afford it Use synonyms
due to
the fact Linking Words
where
tax payment by the working professionals needs to be increased causing Correct word choice
that
this
individual’s net salary to be reduced. Linking Words
Secondly
, old Linking Words
people
need attention, and company when their children are out for Use synonyms
working
. Change the form of the verb
work
Otherwise
, Linking Words
this
might lead to loneliness causing depression.
In my opinion, the above issues can be addressed effectively by the Linking Words
government
with appropriate Use synonyms
strategy
and policies. But the pros gained by Fix the agreement mistake
strategies
Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
these
Use synonyms
people
presence cannot be tallied or handled with any Change noun form
people's
polices
or plans.
Correct your spelling
policies
To conclude
, Linking Words
people
living longer than the expected life span is a positive development, and its advantages definitely outweigh the disadvantages by taking appropriate steps by the Use synonyms
government
.
In many countries, Use synonyms
people
are now living longer than ever before. Some Use synonyms
people
say an ageing Use synonyms
population
creates problems for governments. Other Use synonyms
people
think there are benefits if society has more elderly Use synonyms
people
.Use synonyms
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