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The chart gives information on the percentsage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar

The chart gives information on the percentsage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2915. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make compar
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The par chart presents the proportion of
women
 who started
the
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post-graduate study in five different countries for two years:1980 and 2015.
overall
, Australia has the biggest share in
term
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 of
women
 in
further
 education for the two years.
Accourding
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According
 to the given data, the percentage of
women
 in higher education had a significant increase
through
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 time in the four countries except for Australia, it stayed constant.
In addition
, In the USA and the UK, the proportion of
women
 in post-graduate study
are considerably grow
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 by 20%, for the USA it
incresed
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increased
 from 38% in 1980 to 58% in 2015.
Similarly
, in the UK, it
rised
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rose
raised
rises
 from 35% in 1980 to 55% in 2015.
Furthermore
, there was a minor
rase
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 in France by around 5%.
whlie
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While
 in South Korea, the number of
women
 in higher education was going up
notebly
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notably
noticeably
, so in 2015 it was two times higher than
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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