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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The maps show a comparison between
current
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the current
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 factory
area
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 in
Norbiton
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 town and its development in the future.
Overall
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,
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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 will expand by constructing several buildings and main roads. Currently,
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Norbiton
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the Norbiton
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 industrial
area
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is consist
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consists
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 of several
factories
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factory
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building
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buildings
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 that are located
on
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in
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 the centre and the east of the
area
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.
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, there is only one main straight
roads
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road
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 along the centre until the east of
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area
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the area
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 which connects to the circle roads to reach some factory buildings. There is
also
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a
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apply
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farmland
on
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in
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 the north which is separated by the river.
According to
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 its future development map,
this
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area
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 is planned to expand its
area
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 by constructing some buildings,
such
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 as
school
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schools
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, shops, and medical
centre
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centres
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.
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, the building factories will be replaced by some residences which are scattered around the
Norbiton
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area
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.
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, some
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area
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areas
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 of farmland will
also
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 be replaced by the
housings
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housing
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 which will be connected by a bridge road.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, norbiton with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • planned future development
  • factories
  • warehouses
  • railway line
  • shopping center
  • residential buildings
  • college
  • mixed-use zone
  • commercial
  • residential
  • educational
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian walkways
  • housing
  • community
  • retail services
  • revitalize
  • quality of life
  • vibrant
  • sustainable
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