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The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the outskirts of the town of Fosbury in 1980 and 2015. Summarize information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The figures illustrate the layout of Fosbury
city
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City
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 between 1980 and 2015.
Overall
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, the most noticeable thing is changing in the roads.
Besides
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 that, the face of
town
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the town
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 has developed followed by erasing and adding some features. The ways were developed
with
Change preposition
by
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 adding a circular road in the middle of the town.
In addition
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, in 1980, there were fields but it was turned into warehouses in 2015.
Moreover
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, the developer
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therefore
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 lost the terraced houses and changed
into
Correct pronoun usage
them into
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car
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the car
a car
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 park and supermarket. In 1980,
area
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the area
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 opposite the field
only
Add a missing verb
was only
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fulfilled
Verb problem
filled
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 by tennis courts,
then
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 it developed into
Correct article usage
a sport
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sport
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sports
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center
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centre
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 and car park in 2015.
By contrast
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, the park was relocated near from circular way and the ex-area was used as terraced houses. There was no turning in house land.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban development
  • rural layout
  • open spaces
  • housing areas
  • infrastructure
  • residential areas
  • road networks
  • commercial areas
  • economic growth
  • green spaces
  • urban expansion
  • public amenities
  • community development
  • demolished
  • renovated
  • modernization process
  • transportation infrastructure
  • landscape modification
  • environmental conservation
  • preservation
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