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The table shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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 table chart depicts. the proportion of income spent on 4 common items in the UK in 1998. it is clear from the graph that there are 4 common items.
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 what is shown adults spent money mostly on foodstuffs 25 %, and men spent 14 % on food, followed by women with 39,
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, the children spent more on electronic equipment,
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, the boys spent nearly 38 % on music,
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, Girls 40 % on
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, Girls has spent a lot of cash on songs,
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 the men who spent. 14 % on foodstuffs, looking at women 39 %, and children
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almost 39 % of their money goes to songs, boys, have spent 38 % on music, and 17% was spent on videos by girls.
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, we could say that the most thing he paid for was songs, which was paid for by the ladies, I of the chart about food

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