The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart provides information and gives a helicopter view
concearning
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concerning
the proportion of
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unemployment
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over the
year
2012 in two different areas
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as rural and urban from the first
year
to the
forth
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year
. Generally speaking,at the beginning of the
year
2012 the
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people
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first
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in urban areas
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peaked at 4% high.
However
,in rural
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we can see
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from
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75 to almost 4.5 %.Moving on to the third
year
of jobless mankind
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sharply dropped to the percentage of 2%.It can be seen that
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the rates
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rates
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rate
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of people with no job in the
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countryside
was
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unstable rate .
On the other hand
,after the
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happened in
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side it reached a high of 5.5%
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is
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despondent
.
Therefore
,we can say that
in
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the
last
of the
year
2012
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unemployed
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men
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rates
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leveled
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off to 5%.
Moreover
,
urban
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the urban
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country was
unastable
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unstable
till the end of the period .
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