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The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the unemployment situation in Australia in the year 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar chart provides information and gives a helicopter view
concearning
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concerning
 the proportion of
unemploiment
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unemployment
figure
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 over the
year
 2012 in two different areas
such
 as rural and urban from the first
year
 to the
forth
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year
 . Generally speaking,at the beginning of the
year
 2012 the
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people
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first
year
 in urban areas
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peaked at 4% high.
However
,in rural
areas
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 we can see
the
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significanly
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significant
fell
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 from
near
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 75 to almost 4.5 %.Moving on to the third
year
 of jobless mankind
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sharply dropped to the percentage of 2%.It can be seen that
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the rates
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rates
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rate
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 of people with no job in the
contryside
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countryside
 was
in
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a
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 unstable rate .
On the other hand
,after the
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plugged
 happened in
rural
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the rural
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 side it reached a high of 5.5%
wich
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 is
desponant
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despondent
.
Therefore
,we can say that
in
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at
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 the
last
 of the
year
 2012
un job
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unemployed
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men
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 rates
were
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leveled
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 off to 5%.
Moreover
,
urban
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the urban
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 country was
unastable
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unstable
 till the end of the period .
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