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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The provided chart depicts the proportion of a drug company's sales to
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Asia
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 between 2002 and 2006.
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, the number of medicines sold in
Asia
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 rose steadily
while
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 drugs were consumed less in
Asia
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 over the shown time period. The share of sales for
Europe
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 fluctuated but suffered a decrease from 2002 and 2006.
According to
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 the data, the percentage of the company's sales experienced
a
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significant growth in
Asia
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, going up from 25 to 40% in 4 years.
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However
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 the share lowered for
America
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, suffering a 9% fall.
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 in 2002 the largest proportion of drugs were sold to
America
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, in 2006
Asia
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 was the biggest consumer with 40%. Returning to the remaining data, the number of products shipped to
Europe
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 fluctuated in 2004 with a high of 38%, going down 4% throughout the years. In 2006,
Europe
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 and
America
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 bought the same share of products, both standing at
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 30%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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