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Band 4.5

It is better to save money than to spend it. How far do you agree with this statement? Is saving more important than spending in today’s world?

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With the world in
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continuous economic turmoil, many of us face
difficult
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 in managing our
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. Personally, I
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 that saving is better than spending, and I will explain why.
Firstly
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, saving
money
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 is a kind of insurance for the future. It is possible,
for example
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, that a person might meet unemployment, illness or other problems which
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to spend
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money
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 to be solved. It is essential to have some funds in reserve for these situations and saving is the only way to achieve
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, I believe that saving is itself a good discipline for people to develop, as it builds skills
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 planning, organizing and reaching targets. If people save a small amount of
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 monthly
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 the end they will build a quite large sum.
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, we have to remember the reasons for the current economic problems in the world. The crisis was caused by excessive spending and insufficient saving, not just by individuals, but by corporations and even governments themselves. Saving should be used as a universal strategy now. I do appreciate that some people think differently, believing that it is better to live for the moment and spend
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 some daily spending is essential, of course, I feel
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a
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potentially unwise viewpoint, especially considering the
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 of
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.
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, I believe that saving
money
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 is the wiser
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, not just for an economic reason but
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personal growth. Saving is an invaluable skill and a protection against uncertainty.
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Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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