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the diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram shows the procedure for university entry for high school graduates. Summarize the information by selecting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The flowchart illustrates the admission
process
 for high school graduates.
Overall
, it is a long
process
 and documentation is the essential core of the whole procedure. Individuals must secure
an
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 high school degree prior
starting
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 the admission
process
 followed by completing an application form which is downloadable from
website
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the website
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. Forms
then
 are sent to the
admin
, who
an
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apply
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decides the compatibility of an applicant by going through the
documents
 submitted. If the
documents
 are enough,
admin
 accepts
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 enrolment within two weeks and
process
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the process
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 of subject selection begins. Once subjects are confirmed,
dean
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 initiates the registration
process
 and
applicant
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the applicant
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 enters the university.
However
, if
admin
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the admin
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 feels that the
documents
 are incomplete, a provisional acceptance is
being
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declared after two weeks where individuals can again compile the
documents
 needed and submit
it
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them
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 to the
admin
 for evaluation. In case the candidate is not suitable, the application is rejected provided with two options.
First,
the application can be submitted again but for the alternative course or else it can be directly cancelled.
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