Some people argue that all experimentation on animals is bad and should be outlawed. However, others believe that important scientific discoveries can be made from animal experiments. Can experimentation on animals be justified? Are there any alternatives?

Experimentation on
animals
continues to be a controversial topic in modern society and there are opposite points of view, that now I will present. On the one hand, some people believe that
animals
should not be used as caves and ask for laws to abolish
this
practice.
According to
them,
animals
are living
being
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as humans and so they feel pain and fear. The experiments conducted on them may cause health problems and sometimes
also
lead to death. Animalists argue that humans have no
rights
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to kill
animals
.
Furthermore
, some research projects
last
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years and
lead
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to the death of a huge number of
animals
. These deaths may
also
cause problems in some species, changing the environment's equilibrium.
On the other hand
, others think that there are many reasons
according to
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which
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why
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it is fundamental to do
experiment
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on
animals
.
Firstly
, they suggest that many scientific discoveries came from that type of
tests
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over
past
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years.
For example
, without these
experiments
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there would not be vaccines and other important medical treatments. In fact, it is impossible to
do
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develop a treatment without testing it.
Moreover
, some
animals
' anatomy is similar to
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humans'
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one
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and scientists are able to understand how
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medicine works on the body by watching them. Personally, I feel that the possible benefits of that practice overcome all the clear disadvantages. Without
experiments
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there will not be medical development in the future and some serious illness and pathology that affect a lot of people nowadays will never be solved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific breakthroughs
  • ethical concerns
  • alternatives
  • animal testing
  • moral implications
  • ethical considerations
  • vivisection
  • research methods
  • ethical dilemmas
  • animal welfare
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