With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

‏ Do you ever think of
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on
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Some
people
support
this
idea strongly.Other
people
are against it totally. Both points of view will be discussed. I have my own point of view dealing with the topic. Some
people
support the idea for many reasons. First,
the
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food
is very important
for
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our
life
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,so we should
producing
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more
food
.Second,the
food
give
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people
a high power,and it's good for our muscles.
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, they should
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more producing foods,because it's have more calcium and
vitamin
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to help
people
live in
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the futur
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futur
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future
.Third,the
people
in the
country
they cam more than past so we could make more producing to eat all of them.
Besides
,the
food
not
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only for humans
its
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it is
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also
for the animals and plants or trees. Other
people
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not with reasons.
Firstly
, it's
maket
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market
fat
people
,
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and lazy
people
.
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, They will
broking
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the brain.
Thirdly
,
some
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times
country
focus
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to
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the
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unhealthy
food
,so
this
will
maket
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make
people
not strong.
Secondly
,maybe will see the
food
in the street , and will be more polluted in the
country
.
Also
, the
people
and animals will
feeling not
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healthy and bad mood.
moreover
, all products in the
country
will be high prices. I support the first opinion for many reasons. It is more practical and logical. As I see it, it is more useful and effective. Actually, I do agree with it strongly .
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