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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM foods. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this?

#population #people #focus #gm #foods
‏ Do you ever think of
focus
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focusing
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 on
foods
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food
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? .
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 Some
people
 support
this
 idea strongly.Other
people
 are against it totally. Both points of view will be discussed. I have my own point of view dealing with the topic. Some
people
 support the idea for many reasons. First,
the
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food
 is very important
for
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in
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 our
life
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lives
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,so we should
producing
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 more
food
 .Second,the
food
give
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people
 a high power,and it's good for our muscles.
In addition
, they should
making
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 more producing foods,because it's have more calcium and
vitamin
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 to help
people
 live in
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the futur
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futur
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future
.Third,the
people
 in the
country
 they cam more than past so we could make more producing to eat all of them.
Besides
 ,the
food
not
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 only for humans
its
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it is
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also
 for the animals and plants or trees. Other
people
are
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 not with reasons.
Firstly
, it's
maket
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market
 fat
people
,
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and lazy
people
.
Furthermore
 , They will
broking
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break
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 the brain.
Thirdly
,
some
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sometimes
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 times
country
focus
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focuses
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to
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the
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unhealthy
food
,so
this
 will
maket
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make
people
 not strong.
Secondly
,maybe will see the
food
 in the street , and will be more polluted in the
country
.
Also
, the
people
 and animals will
feeling not
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 healthy and bad mood.
moreover
 , all products in the
country
 will be high prices. I support the first opinion for many reasons. It is more practical and logical. As I see it, it is more useful and effective. Actually, I do agree with it strongly .
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The essay provides both sides of the argument, which shows an attempt to address the prompt fully.
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The conclusion clearly states your personal opinion, which is a crucial part of the task.

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