In a number of countries some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing high speed railway lines for inter-city travel. Others believe this money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
When it comes to
allocate
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allocating
fund
for transportation, the debate between spending Fix the agreement mistake
funds
money
on high speed
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high-speed
railway
versus Fix the agreement mistake
railways
on
improving existing public transport is a prominent one. Change preposition
apply
This
approach has both positive and negative implication
and Fix the agreement mistake
implications
this
essay discusses both the
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apply
approach
before giving Fix the agreement mistake
approaches
final
opinion.
To embark, regarding Add an article
a final
first
approach of spending Change the article
the first
money
on high speed
rail Add a hyphen
high-speed
network
, Fix the agreement mistake
networks
this
way of allocating money
helps in the
better transport and enhanced economy. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
, this
will enable us with high unparalled
speed, which basically reduces the travel Correct your spelling
unparalleled
time
and also
enhances the business transaction like decreasing frieght
service Correct your spelling
freight
time
so that transfer of material becomes more convenient. In contrast
, this
way of spending is sometime
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sometimes
time consuming
and sometimes takes many years or even Add a hyphen
time-consuming
decade
to build. Fix the agreement mistake
decades
This
cause
huge inconvenience to Change the verb form
causes
local
population. Add an article
the local
For instance
, during construction
of Correct article usage
the construction
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the delhi
delhi
metro, huge chunks of Change the capitalization
Delhi
population
had to go through Add an article
the population
lot
of difficulties Change the article
a lot
during
travelling here and there.
Change preposition
while
Secondly
, the
spending Correct article usage
apply
money
in
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on
already
existing Correct article usage
the already
mode
of transport is Fix the agreement mistake
modes
also
good as it required
less Wrong verb form
requires
time
to upgrade and people had
to suffer less. Wrong verb form
have
Also
, this
service is applicable in every nook and corner of the city where the high speed
trains cannot reach. But it has its own demerits like it can cause huge Add a hyphen
high-speed
environment
pollution and huge depletion of resources. Replace the word
environmental
Also
, it needs time to
Add a hyphen
time-to-time
time
renovation services for extracting
maximum output from it.
In conclusion, there are both positive and negative Change preposition
to extract
implication
associated with the thesis statement. In my Fix the agreement mistake
implications
opinion
it is good that we have a faster way of communication but it has to be made if Add a comma
opinion,
situation
persists that means it totally depends on the necessity of any city.Add an article
the situation
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language
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
The introduction covers both sides of the argument, which sets a solid foundation for the essay.
coherence cohesion
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task achievement
You have managed to cover both perspectives on the topic, providing a balanced discussion.
Your opinion
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