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The table shows data about what people in the UK thought the government should increase spending on. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows data about what people in the UK thought the government should increase spending on. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table illustrates data about what people in the UK thought the government should increase spending on.
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, it can be pointed out from the table that, the women were the highest for health
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 the men were the biggest for education and the other areas for gender.
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, the
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 group 35-44 years were
above all
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 of them in the UK. It is clear from the
age
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 group table that, the health increase is 18- 65 years of
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, so it starts at 25% and jumps up by 72%.
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, the 35-44 and 45-54
age
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 groups stay stable for their health.
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, education has decreased from 52% to 26% for the 35-44 years
age
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 group
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, it drops
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 12% for those above 65
age
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.
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, education is 55% for males but it is 40% for females. Other areas are almost the same for gender like the boy is 13% and the girl is 12%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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