Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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fullfill
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task achievement
Increase the length of your essay to more thoroughly explore your ideas and support them with additional examples and explanations.
task achievement
Pay attention to grammar and spelling errors; particularly, common mistakes like 'comunities' (communities), 'beleive' (believe), and 'physiologicals' (physiological) need to be corrected.
task achievement
Try to use a wider range of vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance your argument and make it more compelling.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single main idea and transitions smoothly from one paragraph to the next to enhance coherence and cohesion.
coherence cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction and conclusion that succinctly encapsulate your main points and restate your position on the issue.
task achievement
You address both main reasons that support your view, which forms a balanced argument.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.