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The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of a drug company’s total sales, by region, from 2002 to 2006.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the distribution of a drug company's total
sales
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 across three regions—
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Asia
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—over a five-year period from 2002 to 2006. The percentages of
sales
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 in each region are provided for each year. In 2002,
America
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 accounted for the highest proportion of
sales
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 at 41%,
while
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Europe
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 and
Asia
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 contributed 34% and 25%, respectively. Over the years, the percentage of
sales
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 in
America
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 gradually decreased to 30% by 2006.
Conversely
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,
Europe
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 maintained a relatively stable
share
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, fluctuating slightly between 35% and 38%.
Asia
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,
however
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, experienced a steady increase in its
share
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 of
sales
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, rising from 25% in 2002 to 40% in 2006.
This
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 increase made
Asia
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 the region with the highest
sales
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 percentage by the end of the period, surpassing both
America
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 and
Europe
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. Notably,
while
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America
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’s
share
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 showed a consistent decline,
Europe
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’s
share
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 did not experience significant changes.
Overall
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, the data indicates a shift in the drug company’s
sales
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 distribution, with
Asia
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 becoming the most significant market by 2006,
while
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America
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's contribution steadily decreased.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, europe, america, asia, share with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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