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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today

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The plans illustrate the development of Grange
Park
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 when it first opened in 1920 and Grange
Park
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 today.
Overall
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, there have been some additions and subtractions in Grange
Park
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.
Firstly
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, in 1920, there was a fountain at the centre of the
park
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.
However
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, today, there is a
rose
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garden
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 at the
center
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centre
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 of the
park
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. Seats surround the
rose
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garden
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. There was a
rose
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garden
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 on the
right
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side
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 of the fountain and next to Arnold Avenue. Now, there is a cafe on the
right
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side
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 of the
rose
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garden
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 and next to Arnold Avenue. There was a pond for water plants on the top
right
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side
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 of the
park
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. Currently, there is a children’s play area on the top
right
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side
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 of the
park
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, there was a glasshouse on the bottom
right
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-hand
side
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 of the
park
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. At the moment, there is a water feature on the bottom
right
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-hand
side
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 of the
park
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 and next to Eldon Street. There was a stage for musicians on the left
side
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 of the
park
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. Now, there is an amphitheatre for concerts on the left
side
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 of the
park
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. There was a
rose
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garden
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 on the top left
side
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 of the
park
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. The
rose
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garden
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 is
at
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in
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 the same place. There were two entrances next to Arnold Avenue and Eldon Street. The entrances are at the same palace. There was a
rose
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garden
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 on the bottom left
side
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 of the
park
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. There is no
rose
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garden
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 now
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coherence cohesion
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Provide more detailed and clear ideas when describing the changes in the park to enhance task achievement.
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You have clearly identified and listed the changes in the park from 1920 to present day.
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Your use of specific examples like the rose garden, fountain, and children's play area effectively supports your points.
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Your essay follows a logical structure and your points are well-supported, which helps maintain coherence.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • recreational facilities
  • landscaping
  • naturalistic
  • amenities
  • formal gardens
  • ergonomic
  • symmetric designs
  • inclusive
  • accessible
  • accommodations
  • native plant species
  • societal changes
  • visitor services
  • community events
  • evolution
  • modern playgrounds
  • wildflower meadows
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