Privacy Protection in Europe and the U.S. The United States relies on a "patchwork" of privacy laws to protect individuals' personal information, while Europe has enacted a comprehensive legal regime to protect an explicit "right to privacy." Should the United States follow Europe's lead and enact a broader, more protective privacy law or not? What are the pros and cons of each approach?

It is true that privacy legislation in the European Union is more codified.
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it requires more attention from the enforcer of the law for its correct application. It is more useful and imperative that all the laws that regulate a right are codified and clear in order to be easy to use in their application. But on a deeper examination of the problem in both the European Union and the United States of America, we shall find that the essence of the problem is not in the proper codification of laws. The essence in both jurisdictions is the Protection of Privacy. The real problem, without ostriching, is that, ultimately, polygamy leads to lawlessness.

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To strengthen the essay, offer specific evidence or examples to support the points made. For example, mention particular laws or incidents that highlight the differences or similarities between U.S. and EU privacy legislation.
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Develop and elaborate on your arguments further. Ensure that each point is clearly explained and supported with details or reasons for the reader to understand fully.
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Introduce a clear introduction that states the purpose of the essay and presents the main arguments that you will discuss. Similarly, a concluding paragraph that summarizes the main points and offers a final perspective would significantly improve coherence.
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The essay addresses the topic and acknowledges the differences in privacy legislation between the EU and the U.S., which is a good start at achieving the task response.
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The recognition of the need for codification and clarity in legislation is a solid point.
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The central focus on the protection of privacy as the essential issue is an insightful observation.

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