The table below gives information about the employment rates and the average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian university in 2009. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table gives data about the percentage of
employment
rate
and average annual salaries of new graduates in an Australian university in the period of 2009.
Overall
, what stands out from the table is that the maximum employment
rate
was in the area of study in health, however
, average annual salaries were the second lowest.
Looking at the details, science background student was 62% of their employment
rate
, which was minimal, while
was a very small number. The employment
rate
was 72% who attained a degree from the arts and social science department and the average annual salary rate
was higher than science department.
Turning to the business department students their employment
rate
was 78%, which took the second position in this
table, whereas
the average annual salary was $52,000. Both law and engineering and IT students revealed the same salary of $59,000, which picked top, while
their employment
rates were nearly close.Submitted by belmontsy01 on
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