The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The following graph illustrates the changes in the amount and variety of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that, from the
year
1975, all the
varities
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varieties
of fast foods showed an incline
while
fish
and
chips
started to decrease in popularity.
While
the graph for
Pizza
and
Hamburgers
kept on increasing,
fish
and
chips
showed a significant change in consumption in the
year
1980 before declining again from 95 times eaten per
year
in 1985.
Furthermore
, both
pizza
and
hamburgers
showed a constant number of meals eaten per
year
from 1995 to 2000.
Pizza
, which started from 5 meals eaten per
year
quickly rose in popularity and ended at 85 eaten per
year
whereas
,
hamburgers
, which
also
a
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had a
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quick rise ended at 100 eaten per
year
while
only starting at 10 eaten per
year
.
In contrast
to pizzas and
hamburgers
,
Fish
and
chips
showed a decline from 100 meals eaten per
year
to 40 eaten per
year
by an Australian teenager.
To conclude
, The most popular fast food dish for Australian teenagers in
year
Change the article
the year
show examples
2000 was
hamburgers
, followed by
pizza
and
lastly
by
fish
and
chips
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words year, fish, chips, pizza, hamburgers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • preference
  • frequency
  • trend
  • popularity
  • notably
  • anomaly
  • dominant
  • contrast
  • exhibit
  • proportion
  • category
  • significant
  • rate
  • margin
  • predominant
  • marginally
  • substantial
  • consistent
  • overall
  • variety
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