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The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows information about the kinds of food that teenagers in Australia enjoyed eating. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The following graph illustrates the changes in the amount and variety of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. It is clear from the graph that, from the
year
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 1975, all the
varities
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varieties
 of fast foods showed an incline
while
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fish
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 and
chips
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 started to decrease in popularity.
While
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 the graph for
Pizza
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 and
Hamburgers
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 kept on increasing,
fish
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 and
chips
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 showed a significant change in consumption in the
year
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 1980 before declining again from 95 times eaten per
year
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 in 1985.
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, both
pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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 showed a constant number of meals eaten per
year
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 from 1995 to 2000.
Pizza
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, which started from 5 meals eaten per
year
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 quickly rose in popularity and ended at 85 eaten per
year
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whereas
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,
hamburgers
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, which
also
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a
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had a
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quick rise ended at 100 eaten per
year
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while
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 only starting at 10 eaten per
year
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.
In contrast
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 to pizzas and
hamburgers
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,
Fish
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 and
chips
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 showed a decline from 100 meals eaten per
year
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 to 40 eaten per
year
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 by an Australian teenager.
To conclude
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, The most popular fast food dish for Australian teenagers in
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year
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the year
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 2000 was
hamburgers
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, followed by
pizza
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 and
lastly
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 by
fish
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 and
chips
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, fish, chips, pizza, hamburgers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • preference
  • frequency
  • trend
  • popularity
  • notably
  • anomaly
  • dominant
  • contrast
  • exhibit
  • proportion
  • category
  • significant
  • rate
  • margin
  • predominant
  • marginally
  • substantial
  • consistent
  • overall
  • variety
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