Many people around the world use social media everyday to keep in touch with other people and get news events. Do you think the advantanges outweigh the disadvamtages?
These days most
of
people depend on social media for communication and follow-up with news and Change preposition
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interested
events rather than buying Replace the word
interesting
newspaper
from markets or meeting others face to face. because it makes life easier for them.
Fix the agreement mistake
newspapers
firstly
, some of
people do not have time to visit their friends or family Change preposition
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while
they are busy. they can communicate through the phone with each other, so it is easier for them and they can keep in touch with them most of the time. however
, People need to try not to depend on phone calls, video calls and chatting
for communication, Change the form of the verb
chat
for example
, they can meet in person in their free time and try to do actual activities, to have a
better communication in social life.
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secondly
, To reach fast and easily the news and events they can use social apps anywhere and anytime they want. on the other hand
, you cannot trust on social media, because some fake accounts could post incorrect news, or unreal events for haking
phones. Correct your spelling
hacking
For example
, maybe you will click on the event's link and they can reach your phone and stall money or data. so you have to make sure that you follow trusted accounts and not follow
random accounts who interested in being trending and having more followers and views.
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finally
, Social media is essential in our lives and it is hard for us to not use it, but we have to make sure we use it the right way and not addicted to it.Submitted by hadeelalnemari on
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coherence cohesion
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task achievement
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task achievement
Make sure you completely address all parts of the task. You should weigh both the advantages and disadvantages in detail.
task achievement
You have made a good attempt at discussing both the advantages and disadvantages of social media.
coherence cohesion
Logical flow is present to some extent, making it easier for the reader to follow your arguments.
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