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The graphs below show the number of calls a company received at their Nigerian and Indian call centres in connection wit hthe various cae models they produce.

The graphs below show the number of calls a company received at their Nigerian and Indian call centres in connection wit hthe various cae models they produce.
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The given two charts illustrate the
quantity
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 of calls obtained by a company at
Nigerian
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a Nigerian
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 call centre related to the
numbers
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number
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 of different car models that they manufacture.
Overall
, it is noticeable that in both
year
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years
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model
 D was in the greatest demand.
While
model
 B
representing
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represents
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 33 and 24.
Firstly
,
according to
 the graph of 2010,
model
 D constitute the highest number of requests which amounted to more than 90.
This
 was followed by
model
 C which accounted for 71 calls
of
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 total. After that in the next place in terms of car popularity was
model
 E with
indicator
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an indicator
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 of 68. Both
model
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models
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 A and B had the smallest
quantity’s
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 among all models with
difference
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the difference
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in
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of
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 19 phone
requesting
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requests
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. Turning to 2015 there are two categories that
has
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 above 90, it is
model
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models
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 C and D, 84 and 88, respectively.
In addition
, there are
also
 two models
that
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apply
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named
as
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E and A,
of
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which have approximately the same indicators for demand, 57 and 49, respectively. The latest and the lowest
model
 that people are interested in is the E
model
,
it
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which
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 has only 24 demand.
Which
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This
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 means that people don't have a strong need for
this
 car.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words model with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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