Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.

Given maps illustrate information on how  Frenton changed over  32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and  on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.
The presented table demonstrates data about the two groups of people who have different ages average incomes and the number of poor populations in 3 various states in America.
Overall
, It is important that
all
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of them except
Florida
the figure for young generations is more than old ones;
moreover
,
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Utah
, which has the lowest income, has fewer changes in the poor line than others.
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the fact that
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for people who have less than 18 years old the main area is Utal by 28%;
then
Florida
and
California
nearly have the same percentage, a small portion,
while
for elderly people the proportion is reverse of the
last
item, so
Florida
by 23% has the first level;
thereafter
,
California
and Utal respectively are 13 and 8 per cent. The chart shows average income of
Florida
and
California
is roughly the same as each other, but
California
is 1000 more than 23,000;
Furthermore
, Utal by 17,000 is the
last
one.
In addition
, the fashion of communities, who are under
poverty
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line, has a trend like the prior;
as a result
, the initial is
California
by 16% after that,
Florida
has 4% less than the previous;
additionally
,
finally
is
Utal
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Utah
by 9%.
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