Given maps illustrate information on how Frenton changed over 32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.

Given maps illustrate information on how  Frenton changed over  32 years between 1990 and 2012. There is High Street passing through the Frenton from south to north and  on both sides of the street there are some public buildings, houses and flats.
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The presented table demonstrates data about the two groups of people who have different ages average incomes and the number of poor populations in 3 various states in America.
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of them except
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the figure for young generations is more than old ones;
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,
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, which has the lowest income, has fewer changes in the poor line than others.
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for people who have less than 18 years old the main area is Utal by 28%;
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and
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nearly have the same percentage, a small portion,
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for elderly people the proportion is reverse of the
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item, so
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by 23% has the first level;
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and Utal respectively are 13 and 8 per cent. The chart shows average income of
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and
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is roughly the same as each other, but
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is 1000 more than 23,000;
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line, has a trend like the prior;
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by 16% after that,
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has 4% less than the previous;
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is
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Utah
by 9%.
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