Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other.
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days
people
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beneficial
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compete
work
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others think that individuals ought to cooperate more rather than competing against each other.I will discuss both views to gain an appropriate understanding, and I will support my opinion in conclusion.
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improved
work
speed and Use synonyms
the
quality of Correct article usage
apply
work
. In Use synonyms
the
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a
work
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enviroment whan
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environment where
people
contest with their colleagues it helps them to progress the task in Use synonyms
excellent
way. Change the article
an excellent
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Moreover
people
can achieve their goals when they start to compete with others. Use synonyms
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also
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with my friend Correct your spelling
compete
especially
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, especially
that
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which
helpd
me to Correct your spelling
helped
help
achive
high marks and good scores.Correct your spelling
achieve
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people
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other
is Fix the agreement mistake
others
profitable
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a profitable
think
to do.
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thing
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cooperate
promotes Replace the word
cooperation
a
positive relationships among those around them.To explain more, with Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
collaborate
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collaboration
the
society Correct article usage
apply
become
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becomes
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patient
also
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tryuing
to cooperate more than Correct your spelling
trying
competes
are very satisfied with their lives.
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compete
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people
think that trying to cooperate more with Use synonyms
people
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work
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also
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apply
person
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people
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success.Correct your spelling
achieving
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