The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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TThe bar chart illustrators the amount of trips by kids
in particular
country in 1990 and 2010 from different modes for transport
to travel to and from school .
Overall
, in 1990 walking was the most favoured mode of transport
followed by the bus
, cycling , walking and bus
, and car
passenger
. On the other hand
, in 2010 the most favoured mode of transport
is
Wrong verb form
was
car
Correct article usage
the car
passenger
followed by walking , bus
, walking and bus
and cycling .
in 1990 , most kids used walking as the mode of transport
to school with about 12 million
trips recorded , on the other
hand
Add the comma(s)
hand,
car
passenger
were the lowest at slighlty
over 4 Correct your spelling
slightly
million
people , however
in 2010 the number of car
passenger
increased noticeably to about 11 Fix the agreement mistake
passengers
million
people as travel to and from school , in addition
, cycling were
the lowest with 2 Change the verb form
was
million
trips recorded , furthermore
, walking , cycling , walking and bus
, and bus
has dramatically Add an article
the bus
a bus
deacreased
compared to 1990.Correct your spelling
decreased
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