Advertising has become an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion.

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Nowadays, publicity campaigns are on
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rise. The retailers put the
adds
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ads
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of their
products
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on newsletters, hoardings and social media.
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approach has its own pros and cons.
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, I am holding a partial viewpoint on
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. The points to support my stance are elaborated in the following paragraphs.
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with, those who
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that it has a positive impact on our
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,
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argues
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that it brings economic prosperity. In fact, both advertisers and advertising agencies gain profits because companies showcase their
hot selling
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products
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through
adds
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ads
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to attract
customers
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and they pay handsome money to the
people
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, who
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and put up advertisements.
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,
this
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activity
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is economically positive for both
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sides. Adding more to it, it attract more
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and
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an opportunity to the manufacturers to grow their businesses. As a matter of fact, adverts showing discounts on
products
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attract
buyers
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and it enables the companies to make more profits.
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, it has been seen that during
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online
sales on Amazon and Flipkart, millions of
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buy various
products
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because of lucrative offers and these retail
gaints
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giants
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make heavy profits.
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,
this
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activity
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can be used to grow businesses.
On the other hand
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,
people
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who oppose publicity drives
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that it plays with
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customers
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customers'
customer's
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mind
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to buy useless
products
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. In many cases,
buyers
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usually purchase items that they don't even need, they do it because they
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seen an
add
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ad
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showcasing that product. To illustrate, in Delhi a young boy bought a PS 6 from a sale without telling his parents.
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,
this
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activity
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plays with
people
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's psychology, which indeed is wrong.
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,
this
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activity
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can put
customers
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under
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financial
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a financial
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crisis. It has been seen that most of the
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buyers
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got
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are
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attractive
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attracted
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to the lucrative discounts offered and they tend to buy more
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than
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they
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actual
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need.
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,
people
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should not fall
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into
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trap
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the trap
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of publicity campaigns.
To sum up
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, advertisement has its own positive and negative sides, it depends upon
customers
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, whether, they use it in
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right way,or in
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wrong way.
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grammar
Check grammar and spelling to fix minor errors (e.g., 'opines' should be 'opine', 'PS 6' should be 'PS5').
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph sticks to one main idea to improve coherence. For example, discussing economic benefits and customer psychology separately would make your argument clearer.
conclusion
Include a more detailed conclusion that summarizes your main points and clearly states your opinion.
balance
The essay provides a balanced view by discussing both positive and negative aspects of advertising.
examples
Good use of specific examples like Amazon and Flipkart sales to support claims.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
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  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • manipulative tactics
  • brand loyalty
  • target audience
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • social issues
  • materialism
  • persuasive techniques
  • unrealistic expectations
  • mental health
  • consumer spending
  • brand image
  • societal values
  • awareness campaigns
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