It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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one of the most important
places
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where
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all cities should have is public
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including various
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and squares. I subscribe to the notion that
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planners should
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plenty number of public
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because of
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grounds
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it will be possible that outdoor
places
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change to
determental
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detrimental

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places
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threating
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threatening
treating

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society
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secure
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.
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, outdoor
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such
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as
parks
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and amusement
parks
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are
appropritae
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appropriate

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and ordinary
location
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locations

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for children and
old
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the older

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generation in order to spend
thier
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their

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free time gratis beside
parks
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are special
occasion
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occasions

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for organizing various types of cultural events to improve
people
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lifes
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lives

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meanwhile political events would be holden rally during election days .
secondly
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, improving
city
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infrastracture
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infrastructure

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would influence not only
on
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people
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welfaire
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welfare

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because the public
bear
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bears

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some location for
passtime
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pass time
pastime

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but
also
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on
economy
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the economy

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because if
government
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the government

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dedicated
affordable
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budget to
develope
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developing

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city
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the city

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, it would generate quite
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numbers
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of jobs and businesses.
on the other hand
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, it is possible that some public
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might change to insecure
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where
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illegal

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drug sellers supply
subestance
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and
deliquence
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delinquency
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and
perelous
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coincidence
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coincidences

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occure
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occur

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which
it
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is not safe for
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and is beyond the
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planners'
expectation
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there for the officials have to be
awar
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aware

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to pose restriction in order to decrease ventures. as outlined above,
parks
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and
squars
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change the
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city
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face and in some situations are able to reform
social
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fabric by organizing different meetings and cultural and
relegious
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religious

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event
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beside parents and kids can waste their time without extra charge
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it is possible that some coincidences occur in public
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but if police are acted
inteligence
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intelligence

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Work on improving the logical structure of your essay. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is organized coherently. Use linking words and phrases to guide the reader through your argument.
coherence and cohesion
While you have included an introduction and a conclusion, try to make them more robust and impactful. The introduction should present your main argument clearly, and the conclusion should effectively summarize your main points.
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Support your main points with more relevant and specific examples to enhance the clarity and effectiveness of your argument. This will also help in achieving a more comprehensive response to the task.
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You have touched upon both the benefits and potential drawbacks of public outdoor spaces, showing a balanced perspective.
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Your conclusion summarises your main points and provides a clear take on the issue.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public outdoor spaces
  • community events
  • social cohesion
  • community engagement
  • quality of urban life
  • physical activities
  • public health and wellbeing
  • environmental benefits
  • reduce pollution
  • urban wildlife
  • aesthetic appeal
  • inclusive access
  • economic benefits
  • local businesses
  • tourists attractions
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