The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.

The line graph and pie chart below show information on crime in the UK for the last year.
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The given line graph and pie chart represent the data about
crime
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rate related
with
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age
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and types of
crime
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committed in the United Kingdom
last
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year, respectively.
Overall
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, it can be clearly observed that
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and young adults
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prominent figures rate of crimes,
whereas
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that of the
english
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people
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age
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between 30s-60s was far more relatively low as they aged.
However
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, it is interesting to note that
major
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the major
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crimes
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crime
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founded in Britain was violence.
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with, a closer look at the line graph showing
relationship
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the relationship
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between
age
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and
crime
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reported that British teenagers at the
age
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of 16 to 24 demonstrated with highest jump
of
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in
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crime
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statistics among other ages in a range of 60,000-
80,000
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to 80,000
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cases. Surprisingly, the youngest
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committer
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apply
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the
age
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of 12 doing bad things at 5,000 cases,
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those who
age
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of 20 reach
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peak at 80,000 cases. In regard to types of
crime
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committed, it is noticeable that violent
crime
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was
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accounted for the largest proportion at 46%. Followed by property and
drug related
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drug-related
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crime
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at
a similar figures
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a similar figure
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at 23% and 22%, respectively.
Additionally
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, the public order
crime
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was the fewest at 9%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words crime, age with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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