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The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The bar chart displays the average cost per
kilo
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in
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of
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importation
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importing
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 clothes to seven
european
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European
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 countries
during
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between
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 1997 and 2003.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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argentina
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Argentina
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 has the highest importation in both 1997 and 2003. Followed by
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Brazill
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brazill
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 in the second place,
while
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India
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india
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India
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 and
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Bangladesh
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bangladesh
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Bangladesh
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 were the least consumers among other nations Looking
in
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 the
informations
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information
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 in more detail, in 1993
argentina
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Argentina
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had
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spent nearly 27
pounds
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for
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on
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 one
kilo
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 of clothing.
Moreover
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, in 2003
argentina
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Argentina
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 had
fall
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fallen
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slighty
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slightly
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then
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 25.
Brazill
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Brazil
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 importation was at the same level in both years with almost 23
pound
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pounds
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 for each
kilo
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 of
chothing
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clothing
.
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While jaban
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 ranked at the third place. In 1997 jaban was at 15
pounds
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 per
one
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apply
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kilo
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. For the other
year
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 jaban decreased to around 13
pounds
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for
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per
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kilo
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. The
avrage
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average
 price per
kilo
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 for the other three countries. china,
india
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India
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, and
bangladesh
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Bangladesh
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 in
year
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the year
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 1997
was
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 under 10
pounds
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 respectively,
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however
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however,
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 in 2003 all of the three nations had
a
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significant growth. Each
conutry
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country
 almost doubled. China went from 10 to 17
pounds
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,
india
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India
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 went from 7 to 14
pounds
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 and
bangladesh
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Bangladesh
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 went from 3 to 6
pounds
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words kilo, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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