The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities.
Six
cities
are shown with data regarding railway
systems built underground.
As shown, there is a clear decline in railway
length
proportional to the age of the railway
, going from 394 km
to 126 km
when sorting the cities
chronologically from oldest to newest, conversely
, the next city, Kyoto shows a sharp decline from 126 km
to 11 km
, alongside the city of Los Angeles that proceeds it, showing a slight rise to 28 km
.
We can see that the passengers
per year
tend to rise alongside the length
of the railway
, going from 50 to 775 passengers
per year
, although
the cities
of Paris and Tokyo decline in railway
length
while
still maintaining the rise of passengers
per year
, going from 775 to 1191 and 1927 passengers
per year
.
To summarize, railways tend to continue rising in length
the newer they are, although
a few newer cities
have relatively short railways, and longer railways tend to experience more traffic per year
in passenger
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passengers
although
a few cities
contradict this
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