You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You have a Facebook friend living in another country and s/he is curious to learn about a major news item in your country. Write a letter to your Facebook friend. In your letter describe a news story in your country explain why people are interested in it say how the story personally relates to you You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..., You should write at least 150 words.

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Dear Maninder, I hope

this

letter finds you in the best of spirits and radiant health. I am writing

this

letter to tell you about the NEET Exam leak scam, which is

talk

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town

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these days. Many of us are interested in

this

issue because in India, in order to,gain entry into a professional medical course students are required to sit in and clear the

above mentioned

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entrance exam. Owing to

this

scam, pupils and their

guardian

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have become uncertain about their future and they are closely monitoring the situation

arised

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Further more

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, my younger brother Rajdeep was

also

a NEET aspirant. He prepared thoroughly for

this

competition and he was certain that he would easily get a seat in the Medicine course in a Public College.

However

after

this

scandal, he is not sure

about

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apply

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whether he will get the desired result or not. I hope

this

information gives you a deep insight

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into

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the

headline

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running on a few news channels and newsletters. I am looking forward to hearing you on

this

. Yours lovingly, Jatinder.

Submitted by mrsdns on Thu Aug 29 2024

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Consider checking for minor grammatical errors and awkward phrases. For instance, 'monitoring the situation arised' should be 'monitoring the arising situation' or simply 'monitoring the situation.'

coherence cohesion

Using linking words or phrases could improve the flow between paragraphs and ideas, making the letter even more cohesive.

task achievement

The letter covers all necessary aspects of the task: it describes the news story, explains its importance, and includes a personal connection.

task achievement

Good use of a friendly and conversational tone suitable for writing to a friend.

coherence cohesion

The paragraphing is clear, with each paragraph focusing on a different aspect of the task.

coherence cohesion

The letter has a logical structure, starting with a greeting and closing with a strong, warm conclusion.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

178 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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