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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The map demonstrates a
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 plan by the city planner to construct a new shopping mall in Brandfield with two sides S1 and S2.
Overall
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, there is a significant plan proposed with various facilities in two different areas. S1
area
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 has included a gold course and park in the green
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 which is located in the northwest of the
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. Approximately 80 per cent of the housing centre is in the S1
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 sliced up by the road with the city centre in the main of Brandfield. S2
area
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, the city centre is extended largely in S2 compared with S1 and a river road divides it. there is an industrial estate southeast of the map
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 completely covered only by the S2
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, there is an empty place in the southwest of of map.
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, the Railway is planned to be built from south of S2 to north of S1.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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