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The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word

The following two pie charts display the results of a survey into the popularity of various leisure activities among European adults in 1985 and 1995. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 word
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The two
chart
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 above
illustrated
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illustrate
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 the preferences
of
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for
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 leisure activities of adults in Europe in 1985 and 1995 respectively. Nearly 40% of the respondents
have chosen
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chose
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talk
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to talk
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 to someone in their leisure time in 1985, with the
overall
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 rate
dropped
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dropping
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 to just over 30% in 1995. Despite there
was
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being
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 an increase in the interest
to
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in
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 "talking with friends", the preference
of
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for
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 "talking with family" fell
more
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by more
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 than
a
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apply
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half after a decade. The percentage of European adults using digital technology as their leisure
activities
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activity
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 almost doubled in 1995, with an addition of 27% of the respondents
selected
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selecting
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 "playing computer games" combined with 30% of them
choosed
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choosing
 to watch TV, which has a rate almost similar to 1985. There was a dramatic decrease in the
amount
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number
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 of respondents choosing "eating out" and "other" in 1995 compared to 1985, with both of the categories
dropped
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dropping
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 by
two-third
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two-thirds
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 to 8% and 2% respectively.
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