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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart gives information about how people prefer their
coffee
 and tea in five different cities in Australia.
Overall
, it is evident ,that folks in Melbourne are keen about being served their
coffee
 or tea in a cafe .
While
 individuals in Adelaide prefer to
drink
 their
coffee
 fresh . In
details
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, a significant portion of the population in Melbourne just under 65 per cent prefer their
drink
 to be made in a
coffeeshop
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coffee shop
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. Followed by , Aussies in Hobart comprising nearly 63% .
Additionally
, humans in Brisbane just over
a
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apply
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half choose to
drink
 instant
coffee
 .
However
, Both towns Brisbane and Adelaide share similar patterns.
Furthermore
 , almost 35 % of people from those two cities contribute to
drink
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drinking
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 their
coffee
fresh
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freshly
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 made .
Moreover
,
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the Horbart
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Horbart
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Hobart
 community dominate the other cities by choosing instant
coffee
 over freshly made
coffee
 .
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, drink with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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