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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's corree and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart displays the results of a survey done in five cities in Australia about the consumption of
coffee
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 and
tea
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 routine.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 Australian
people
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 love
coffee
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 and
tea
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. All five cities showed that a lot of Australian citizens went to a cafe shop for
tea
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 or
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks. Looking at the information in more detail. More than 60%
residents
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of residents
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 in Sydney, Melbourne, and Hobart. Went to buy
coffee
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 or
tea
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last
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 month.
While
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 55% of
people
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 in Brisbane went to drink
coffee
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 and
tea
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 the
last
Linking Words
 month. And 50% of citizens in Brisbane went to grab
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in the
last
Linking Words
 4 weeks. The bar chart showed that 445% to 55% of
people
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 in all
the
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apply
show examples
five cities like their
coffee
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 instance,
also
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 between 45% to 55% of
people
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 love to drink fresh
coffee
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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