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The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of fast food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000. ▪️Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph depicts the transition of fast
food
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consumption
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 by Australian adolescents between 1975 and 2000.
Overall
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, the amount of
fish
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 and
chips
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consumption
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 plunged whilst that of
pizza
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 and
hamburgers
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 considerably rose in the given period. In 1975, the largest fast
food
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comsumed
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consumed
 by Australian teenagers was, by far,
fish
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 and
chips
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with
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apply
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100
times
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 per year, followed by
hamburgers
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 and
pizza
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with
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apply
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less than 10
times
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.
Nonetheless
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, the number of
fish
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 and
chips
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 declined to just below 90
times
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 in 1980 before slightly recovering its number in 1985 of approximately 95
times
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. The downward trend of
fish
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 and
chips
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 proceeded, reaching a trough in 2000 with 40
times
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 annually. At the same time, the amount of
consumption
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 of both
hamburgers
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 and
pizza
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 soared significantly, surpassing that of
fish
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 and
chips
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 by 1990 and 1995, respectively.
Hamburgers
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 became the most popular fast
food
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 by 1995, which were annually consumed 100
times
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.
Also
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,
pizza
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 stood as the second most popular fast
food
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 by 1995 with
the
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a
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 yearly
consumption
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 of approximately 80
times
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, consumption, fish, chips, pizza, hamburgers, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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