You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graphs below show the total percentage of films released and the total percentage of ticket sales in 1996 and 2006 in a country. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
In
this
era of technology, the
production
of
movies
and songs has been gaining more and more popularity drastically,
however
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there exists a wide range of
movies
and productions
for example
action, drama, comedy, fantasy, romance etc.
Due to
rapid
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the rapid
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growth of technology
,
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and, availability
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availability
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the availability
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of
medium
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media
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the
level
of interest of people watching television, cinema and home
theater
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theatre
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has increased effectively. Here we are given two types of bar graphs where it has been demonstrated that
wide
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a wide
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range of
movies
are produced as the years
increased
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increase
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.
Furthermore
from the bar chart
firstly
we can observe that in
the
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1996 the
level
of
production
was less with respect to the sales of the movie tickets.
For instance
,
these
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the
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sales of the ticket
has
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have
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also
increased as the year increased
along with
the population and the evolving of technology. When
make
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making
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an observation
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observation
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observations
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with
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of
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the granular
level
of
the
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apply
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movie
production
we can distinguish that people have shown more demand for the
production
of
the
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comedy and drama. But for the fantasy and romance
movies
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movies,
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the
level
of sales of the ticket has decreased
along with
the
production
of the
movies
of same type
also
.
Therefore
we can conclude that people are more inclined towards
the
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drama and comedy
movies
instead
of fantasy and romance
gener
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genre
genres
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "along with, also".
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words production, movies, level with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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