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You are applying for a new job and international company. You would like to ask your previous employer to write a reference letter for you. Write a letter to your previous manager in your letter. Remind your manager of the position you worked in tell him or her position you applying for why you want ask him to provide you with the directors letter

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Dear John, I hope
this
letter
 finds you well. I am your previous employee. I want to request you to provide me a reference
letter
 for my new
jobOffer
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job offer
. I
want
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want to
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 inform you that I worked with your organization from November 2021 to December 2023 at Networth Immigration as a shift manager for
night
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the night
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 shift. My job responsibilities included managing
shift
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shifts
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 for all employees, maintaining
list
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a list
the list
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 of hours,
contacting
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and contacting
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Payroll
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the Payroll
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 department for any queries of employees or management. Currently, I am working
in
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at
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 Amazon as a team leader and they want me to
promote
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be promoted
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 to the position of HR.
Therefore
 they want me a reference
letter
 from my previous employer mentioning
rules
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the rules
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 and responsibilities. So I request you to provide me with
letter
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the letter
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 I would be
thankful
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grateful
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 to you. thanks and regards, Neha Sharma
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task achievement
Ensure proper use of articles (e.g., 'a reference letter', 'a new job offer').
coherence cohesion
Pay attention to punctuation and capitalization (e.g., 'I want to inform you', 'Amazon').
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Provide more specific details about the responsibilities and skills demonstrated in your previous job to make the reference letter more impactful.
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Your letter is polite and concise, making your request clear.
coherence cohesion
You effectively outline your past position and current aspirations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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