The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the
water
consumption
globally over the
last
century.
While
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the table chart demonstrates
comperative
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comparative
competitive
rates of
utalized
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utilised
water
in both Barzil and Congo in
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ghe
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the
year 2000.
Overall
, it can be
clealry
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clearly
seen that agriculture maintained its position throughout the years as the dominant source of
water
consumption
.
In contrast
,
domestice
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domestic
use
generated the least proportion, despite the slight growth in the
last
few decades.
According to
the table chart, Brazil experienced
overpopution
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overpopulation
overproduction
regarding its minimal
irrigarted
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irrigated
land, reflecting a vast increase in
water
usage.
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Conversely
, Congo
exibited
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exhibited
a
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minor
water
consumption
due to
the fact that it
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smaller
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population and
wider
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region in 2000. In detail, approximately 500
km
was used for agriculture in the beginning period of time, which dramatically increased throughout the years to reach 3000
km
.
Furthermore
, industrial and domestic
use
had identical rates, about 1
km
respectively. As industrial
use
started rising in 1960, domestic
use
remained stable until 1980.
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Adding
to that,
in
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the end of
this
era, industrial
use
grew from nearly 1
km
to 1000
km
.
On the other hand
, domestic
use
ended at 500
km
. In terms of
water
consumption
in 2000, Brazil, the greater
popultion
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population
, which is 176 million, generated 359 m for consuming
water
.
Nevertheless
, 8 m Congo used
water
as a result
of less population, 5.2 million, and bigger space, 100
km
.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, consumption, use, km with synonyms.
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