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The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.

The chart below shows the percentage of the population in the UK who consumed the recommended daily amount of fruit and vegetables in 2002, 2006 and 2010.
#percentage #population #uk #amount #fruit #vegetables
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the UK
citizen
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citizens
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 who consumed
fruits
 and
vegetables
 which the
recomentdation
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recommendation
recommendations
 routine every four years in 2002, 2006, and 2010.
It is clear that
 the percentage of
fruits
 and
vegetables
 which people consumed experienced an upward trend
through out
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throughout
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 the period.
While
 the figure of women was the highest than men and Children. In 2002,
female
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females
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 consumed
fruits
 and
vegetables
 in
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their dialy
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dialy
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daily
 routine was around
one fourth
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one-fourth
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 of the proportion and slightly increased
around
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to around
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 32% in 2006 and
turn
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turned
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 over to 27%
at the end
 of the period.
In contrast
, the proportion of
fruits
 and
vegetables
 which men consumed was lower than women around 22% in the first years before slightly
reach to
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reaching
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 28% in the next
four-years
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four years
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.
However
, it declined fewer to 24% in 2010
On the other hand
, The figure
of
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for
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fruits
 and
vegetables
was
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apply
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eaten by
childrens
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children's
children
 shows the lowest percent rather than adults. In 2002, Kids
eat
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ate
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friuts
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fruit
 and
vegetables
 around 11% and a little bit increased to 16% in the next
four-years
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four years
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 before slightly
increased
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increasing
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 to 14% in 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruits, vegetables with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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