some people think that zoos are crual and should be clouse down. others belive that zoos are useful in different ways.discuss both views and give your opinion?
minority
belive
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believe
zoos
are rude and that has to be close
down. majority Replace the word
closed
thiks
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think
zoos
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agree with Change the capitalization
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statement
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,
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apply
zoos
do not treat animals
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as
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and
zoos
have high
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a high
capasity
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capacity
of
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for
animals
which damage
their freedom Correct subject-verb agreement
damages
a
but Correct article usage
apply
soam
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small
zoos
protect endangerd
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endangered
animals
as well as
the students can very easily research them and we can see animals
from other contries
in Correct your spelling
countries
one
place.
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say Unnecessary verb
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zoos
should be clouse
down. yes, it Correct your spelling
closed
have
some reasons. Change the verb form
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one
reason is some zoos
do not tread
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treat
for
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apply
animals
.for
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not
clean their cages and they don't feed them properly Add a missing verb
do not
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they don't care animals
. Change preposition
about animals
one
more reasons
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reason
zoos
have high
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a high
capasity
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capacity
of
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for
animals
which damage
their freedom. Correct subject-verb agreement
damages
therefore
animals
are more likely to die.
some people belive
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believe
zoos
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say
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saying
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told you. We get a lot of benefits from it.if Change the capitalization
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one
of them zoos
can protect endangerd
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endangered
animals
so we can see those animals
. another adventure is the student can very easily research them Therefore
, there is no need to search for animals
in the forest. another adventure is we can see animals
from other contries
in Correct your spelling
countries
one
plase
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place
therefore
people don't want to spend money.
according to
the given justifications in the first and second Fix the agreement mistake
paragraphs
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paragraph,
belive
about Correct your spelling
believe
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the statment
statment
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statement
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Finally
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would like to say we must protect Change the capitalization
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animals
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