The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below shows the percentage of adults of different age in the UK who used the Internet every day from 2003-2006. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graph illustrates the proportion of Internet
users
in five
age
groups from
aged
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age
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16 to more than 65 years old from 2003 until 2006.
Overall
, as
older
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the older
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the
users
get, they
became
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become
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less available online than the younger ones. We can
also
notice that as the year changes, there is an upward tendency of people accessing the online network. Web
users
aged 16-24 are significantly the easiest
you
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apply
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will
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and
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most likely to find online,
whereas
it will get harder to find an older person. Especially in 2003, it is definitely difficult to find elderly aged more than 65 years old wandering online.
In contrast
, people aged over 45 have more awareness of being online than the older
age
group. Regardless of
the
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apply
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age
,
eventually
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eventually,
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by
2006
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2006,
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internet
is
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will be
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accessible to everyone as the total
users
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number of users
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mostly
increase
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increased
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by 20% in all
age
group
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groups
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since 2003, with
exception
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the exception
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to
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of
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the
teenager
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teenage
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group with only a slight increase of 10%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words users, age with synonyms.
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