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Band 5.5

You have a spare room in your Apartment that you would like to rent out to a student. Write a letter to your Student Accommodation Officer of local college and say 1. Where is your apartment located? - close to university 2. When will the room be available - Room will be available next month 3. What are the requirements for a student to stay?- no parties , no loud music other restrictions.

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you that I want to rent out a single
room
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 in an apartment which is located in front of the University. My name is Rhea, and I am living in a
two bedroom
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two-bedroom
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 apartment , which is situated in front of the University campus . Currently, I am looking for a
student
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 to share
accomodation
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accommodation
 with me . I am enrolled in
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a third
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third year
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third-year
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 master's degree in law
in
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 your University .
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Room
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The room
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 will be available from next month from September 1st . Most of the students are coming in the fall semester and start looking for
the
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room
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 . For one person rent will be $900 which includes two meals , Wifi and laundry .
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 most of the
accomodations
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accommodation
are
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is
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 expensive,
but
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this
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room
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 is really affordable for a new
student
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. There are some basic requirements in order to stay here
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 as no parties , no loud music and maintain
cleaniness
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cleanliness
everytime
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. It is a wonderful apartment with
peaceful
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a peaceful
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 environment that every
student
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 needs . I
attach
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address
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the address
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 with
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 email
and
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please contact me
on
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 604-396-8539,if any
student
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 shows interest in
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 . I am looking forward to your reply. Yours faithfully, Roopkamal kaur.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure you re-read your letter to correct small grammatical errors, such as missing punctuation and agreement in number (e.g., 'cleaniness' should be 'cleanliness').
suitable writing tone
Try to maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. Starting the letter with full formality is good but keep it consistent until the end for a stronger impression.
task achievement
You provided all the necessary details regarding the apartment, availability, cost, and requirements in a clear manner.
coherence cohesion
The letter is generally well-organized with logical structure and clear paragraphs.
suitable writing tone
You maintained a polite and formal tone, which is suitable for the context of writing to a Student Accommodation Officer.
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